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New Land by ~dark-melancholy:icondark-melancholy:

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The Marean noblewoman Lanyrene ax Trastasia sets out on a voyage to discover riches for the glory of the Empire and, more importantly, for her own sake. Instead, she and her crew discover a strange tribe of natives. What do they want, and do they indeed possess the gold and luxuries Lanyrene seeks?

Comments of all kinds are more than welcome :)

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The story ends on a sort of cliffhanger. It doesn't mean the story will continue or end there (haven't planned that far ahead!), but can be considered an open ending for now.

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~RounderSofter Jul 4, 2009, 1:05:40 PM
I'll be damned twice. It happens the best part was missing when i read this chapter for the first time (on your blog) :XD: No wonder i did not understand what was going on in part II :iconlarryplz:

Very subtle, and even more appreciable because of that ! Your narrative style is really cool and the three main characters, interesting. Though Lanyrene looks like a cliché of a "i have a pen in my ass and anyway i do not talk to you peon" noble bitch in this chapter :XD: she becomes far more intersting once her devouring ambition is revealed i think :p
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~dark-melancholy Jul 5, 2009, 2:11:41 AM
Silly me! I didn't think to post the rest of this part when I decided I would put the whole thing on DeviantArt soon anyway. It's a good thing you figured it out! :D

It's great that you like my writig style, because I have the feeling it's just too weird for most people :P Also, I can see your point about Lanyrene's "character development". There's an in-story reason for it as well as a "literary" one: I try to dig deeper into the characters as the story progresses, presenting more and more layers to the reader so he/she isn't overwhelmed.
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~RounderSofter Jul 6, 2009, 4:30:26 AM
Haha sure :aww:
I can't seriously talk about your writting style for obvious reasons :) but it's pleasant to read you, because i think you tend to write an "european way", less direct and more twisted than the american style for novels. I don't know if i'm very understandable here ^^; but nevermind, i liked the whole thing that's all i can tell :p
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~dark-melancholy Jul 6, 2009, 5:51:52 AM
That's cool, because I enjoy writing in a slightly "convoluted" fashion. I think I need to be less brief in my descriptions, though. Although with shorter descriptions people can make up their own mind about how the people and places look...
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